Second

For my second piece I chose an assignment where we were supposed to explain our name, how we got it, and the experiences that came with the name. In my original writing I was slightly more dis-organised, and had problems with punctuation and I used alot of paranthasese. I think I got the general point across pretty well, but it definatly could have been better. I could have included the infomation that I had in paranthasese in a way that didn't inclue paranthases, which I did in the second draft of this assignment.